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2 new songs

posted by dj lux

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1. DjLux27 Sept 2003, 18:52
   Hi all :lol:
   
   Working hard here <_< :huh: ,I did 2 new songs,let me know what do u think of :)
   
   The first,Unwilling,is finished.
   
   http://digilander.iol.it/simartig/unwilling.zip [4.88 mb,mp3 format,128kbps]
   
   The second,Togheter Alone is still a "promo",i have to reorder and finish it asap.
   
   http://digilander.iol.it/simartig/ta.zip [4.82 mb,mp3 format,128kbps]
   
   Let me know what do u think of this 2,every good or bad comment is welcome.
   
   Edit:
   
   For who didn't listen "Missing",i reloaded it in mp3 format,this is the final version
   
   http://digilander.iol.it/simartig/missing.zip [4.67mb,mp3 format,128kbps]
2. David McGowan27 Sept 2003, 19:36
   Listening to unwilling Now..
   
   Nice sounding synth , and nice melody , the beat fits in pretty good, only suggestion so far is , maybe do a little filtering work on the synth. You need to check your eq's once the song is going , it really sounds like its clipping/distorting, also there is a whirling/whinning sound in your percussion. and when you kill the beat you kill that too, and it sounds funny.. if you kill the beat i would leave the whirling sound going. The track itself is kind of on the simple side, not too many layers, the beat is either on or off, no changes. overall its got some nice elements, but needs some work. as far as eq'ing, anti-clipping, little perc work, and more layers.
   
   Listening to together alone now....
   Nice rain/lightning fx's. I dont really care for that piano.. sounds like a bright piano. That kick sample could be better, but youve brought soem other elements in , and its sounding better. after awhile that constant rythem synth the one thats going every 16th or every 32nd note, gets kinda anoying. also ive noticed in both songs so far you only uses kicks and chrashes, try some open and closed hi hats.
   The levels sound a little better but still the piano's sound like they over power everything else.
   
   You have some good elements here, Structure wise it doesnt really follow the trance structure there are no breakdown's and buildups as far as i could tell. Your melodys are very nice tho.
   
   This is only constructive criticsm, to hopefully help improve your skills.
   
   Keep on producing.
   
   David :lol:
3. TranceSynthVania27 Sept 2003, 20:21
   Listening to Unwilling.
   
   the synth sound is good, but damn will I hear another sound in this track ? ;)
   It just gets too overwhelming.
   The Kick and bass is NICE! Hard and deep, I like that....
   hmm, this almost sound like a loop-based track since every part just seem to start/stop just like that. Try fading sometimes. And try making a track from start to stop WITHOUT so much copying and pasting... I know it's hard, but it definetly makes you put in lots'a different "fills" and stuff.
   I like bass, but dam', don't crank it too loud.. the whole thing is distorted.. If it was in your mind to have a little distort effect on the beat, then use some distortion/overdrive effect on the Kick and bass ONLY.
   I hear that whirling sound too, and I don't like it too much.. I would let it go.
   
   Listening to Together Alone.
   
   hmm, have you actually thought about how awesome this start could get if you replaced that piano with a real piano and without any delay? Add reverb instead! And for god's sake, when you want to have a piano like that which is meant to sound nice, then PLAY it and record it live from a keyboard or something, sounds much better... no matter if you can't play.. you could always quantize later.
   There's that nice kick and bass again :) But it really doesn't fit in this song...
   If you didn't think "techno" in this song, only "nice, chill-out" it would be much better imo...
   
   well, that's my opinions on the songs... overall I think you just need more practice... The best way to get that is to make much music, and try co-oping with some people. And just so you know: There's nothing wrong with your songs! You should just learn a few tricks and tips, and that will come with time.
   
   Good Luck, man!
4. Tim29 Sept 2003, 21:03
   Unwilling:
   
   Hmm i actually like that first synth sound, The first kick sounds distorted! Wooh to much going on at 1:26.
   
   Try adding some other sounds, this is getting repetetive. Wooh easy on the volume this is distorted!
   
   Try adding some more sound layers and try to keep the volume down!!!
   
   Anyway, keep it up
   
   Tim
5. BALLISTIC SOLUTION14 Oct 2003, 02:22
   promote your work 2 new songs